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mickys411	A Christmas Carol	Lead	[-]
Posts: 195 (12/07/08 11:23 PM) Reply Quote More My Recent Posts	Here's my holiday story The Monkees meet the characters from the popular Holiday tale A Christmas Carol A Christmas Carol It was that time again. People young and old acted merry to one another, stores and shops through out town were full of buyers and were decorated from celing to floor, tinsle and lights brighten the streets, it was indeed Christmas time. And nobody could be more excited that it was coming, especially the Monkees. They had many gig lined up for them, playing at several parties and events, including the annual holiday show hosted at the country club. The guys were quite glad all these jobs were coming because, not only did they have enough to have a nice Christmas, but made enough to keep up with their rent, which made Babbit a bit happy. One day the Monkees had a day off, so they spent it buying gifts for their families and for one another to, getting a tree, and decorating it as well as the pad. When they were fished, the guys decided to have a pizza delivered to the pad and planned on hanging out at home, instead of getting crammed by the crowds like they did earlier that day. As they ate, the guys watched the famous Holiday film 'A Christmas Carol' "That movie always get to me," sniffed Peter, when the movie ened. "I agree, even 100 years after Charles Dickens wrote it, it's still a very well know story," said Mike. "You know, I wonder what it would had been like living in that time, said Davy. "I say very tough, especially if you worked for somebody like Ebenezer Scrooge," said Micky. The Monkees let out four big yawns, they were indeed tired from a long week and decided to got to bed. Tune in to see what will happen Mickys411 (Laura)
NoraLou		#1	[-]
Posts: 11080 (12/07/08 11:58 PM) Rev. Nora Paperback writer Amazing Grace New Admin Reply Quote More My Recent Posts	I can't wait for the next part!
ElmerWitherspoon		#2	[-]
Posts: 752 (12/08/08 12:20 AM) Man Alive Reply Quote More My Recent Posts	Should be another great story! -Tom
Vkitty		#3	[-]
Posts: 210 (12/08/08 10:59 AM) Reply Quote More My Recent Posts	Awesome beginning! I can't wait to see what's next, as well.
1bigbeatlesfan		#4	[-]
Posts: 313 (12/09/08 1:38 AM) Fanfic,She Wrote night owl Reply Quote More My Recent Posts	This is a great idea, Laura! Let's see... When the guys woke up the next morning, they had quite a shock. Gone was the large bedroom they shared, it was now a much smaller room that was very cold. Their beds were gone too, replaced by straw-filled mattresses placed in a circle around a small stove. "What's going on?" Micky asked, pulling his ragged blanket around himself. "Yeah, we're not at the pad anymore." Mike said, getting up from his mattress. Mike walked to the door and opened it to find a hallway with doors along either side. He closed the door and opened it again. Still the same scene confronted him. "We're in some sort of apartment building." Mike told the others. "What happened to our pad?" Peter asked, joining him. "Where are we?" Just then, a young woman wearing 18th century clothing came out from one of the doors a short distance away. "Excuse me, miss?" Mike said, and the woman turned to him. Seeing him, she let out a gasp. "Put some decent clothing on, or I'll have the bailey on you!" She exclaimed, then hurried away. Mike and Peter looked at their crazy pj's, then at the woman. "Wait, we want to know where we are!" Peter yelled after her, but the young woman was gone. The two Monkees went back into their apartment. "Any luck?" Davy asked. "No, there was a woman dressed in old-fashioned clothes, but she didn't want to talk to us." Mike replied. "I was looking at these old gas lamps, and these clothes stacked on the shelf." Davy said, "I think we're back in time." "Or we ate too much pizza last night and this is a collective dream we're having." Micky put in. "Well, we better get dressed and find out what's really going on, and try to get back to our own time." Mike said. So the Monkees dressed in their 18th century clothes so they could go outside. To Be Continued... Lisa, formerly Larrysgirl The Glick Chick's Monkees' Lair!
mickys411	A Christmas Carol (fanfic)	#5	[-]
Posts: 196 (12/09/08 11:18 PM) Reply Quote More My Recent Posts	Awsome Lisa As the Monkees looked around and saw that they really weren't in their own time They saw people wearing the same type of clothes as they had on, and the streets were all cobblestone instead of concrete. Also, there were no cars, but horsedrawn buggies, and street carts and small shops replaced the store they were used to. Just as the guys countinued their walk around town, a buggy came speeding pass them. "Get out of the way pesants!" shouted a voice as the buggy passed by them, which caused the Monkees to fall to the ground. "What the heck was that all about?" asked Mike. "That was Ebenezer Scrooge," said one woman. "The richest and most obnoxious man in town," said a man. "Say fellas, you don't suppose?" said Davy. "Are we really?" asked Peter. "We are," said Micky. Indeed the Monkees were living out the story of A Christmas Carol Mickys411 (laura)
1bigbeatlesfan		#6	[-]
Posts: 314 (12/10/08 3:06 AM) Fanfic,She Wrote night owl Reply Quote More My Recent Posts	Wonderful, Laura! "Well, what do we do now?" Micky asked. "If we're in the story, we might as well try and live it." Mike said. "Maybe then we can get home." "How do we live the story?" Peter asked, confused. "Let's go see Mr. Scrooge at his office, and let's see what happens there." Davy answered. So the Monkees went in the direction of Scrooge's buggy and soon found the place, the "Scrooge and Marley" sign hanging over the door. However, the guys were hesitant to go inside. "What do we say to him?" Micky asked, "We can't just say, 'we're dreaming about your life, and we want to be a part of it.' "can we?" "Hey, let's say he owes us an apology for knocking us down before." Peter said. "He'll never do that." Davy said, shaking his head. "Let's pretend we're the guys who came in looking for a donation and Scrooge threw them out." Micky said. The others agreed it wasn't a bad idea and so went inside Scrooge's office. To Be Continued... Lisa, formerly Larrysgirl The Glick Chick's Monkees' Lair!
mickys411	A Christmas Carol	#7	[-]
Posts: 198 (12/11/08 12:02 AM) Reply Quote More My Recent Posts	Great Job Lisa Here's more... When the Monkees walked into the office, they saw two men, one looked to be in his early 60's, while the other man looked to be in his mid 30's seated at desked. The guys knew the men were Scrooge and Bob Craggit. Good Morning gentlemen," Davy spoke up. Bob and Scrooge looked up at the Monkees. "Good Morning sirs," said Bob. "What is this all about?" Scrooge snapped. "Well, we're collecting funds for the poor," Mike answered. Scrooge at up from his desk and appoarched the Monkees. "Now gentlemen you do realize that if I give you money to give to the poor, the porr won't be poor antmore whon't they," said Scrooge. "That's true," said Peter. "And if they people aren't poor anymore, then won;t have to raise funds for them anymore right?" "I suppose that's right," said Micky. "And if you don't have to raise funds for the poor anymore, then you'll be put out of job, and you don;t want to be put out of a job on Christmas Eve?" "I guess that means you won't give?" "You mean right, now get out of my office before I call the authorities!" The Monkees then left the office. "Sir, do you mind if I get some firwood for the office?" asked Bob. "Just be quick Craggit," Scrooge barked. Bob then placed his coat on and headed outside, not get firewood, but to look for the Monkees. And to his luck they didn't go far away from the office. "Excuse me gentlemen!" Bob called out. The Monkees stopped walking and turned to Bob. "My name is Bob Craggit, I work for Mr. Scrooge and I do apolgize for his behavior, he even acts like this to Fred his nephew." Bob then reached into his coat pocket and pulled out a coin. Here it isn't much but please take it," he said, handing the coin to the Monkees. "Thank you sir, but we couldn't," said Davy. "But I want to help those who haven't got much, especially those with families. "You have a family Bob?" Mike asked. "Oh yes, my wife Mary and I have five kids," said Bob. "What are thier names?" Peter asked. "Ben, Martha, Toby, Jenny and Tim." "Do you mind if I ask you a question Bob?" Micky asked. "Not at all," said Bob. "If Mr. Scrooge is such an awful person as people say, why do you work for him?" "Well five years ago, Mr. Scrooge bought out the accountants office that I worked at for a number of years. And my former boss recomened Mr. Scrooge to hire me." Uh ho writer's block Take it away Lisa Mickys411 (Laura)
1bigbeatlesfan		#8	[-]
Posts: 317 (12/12/08 1:58 AM) Fanfic,She Wrote night owl Reply Quote More My Recent Posts	I have something Laura... "Thank you for the coin, Mr. Crachit." Micky said, "Merry Christmas to you." "And to you, kind sirs." Bob said. "Crachit where are you?" Scrooge's voice could be heard from the office. "I better go, he won't hesitate to fire me." Bob said, running away. The Monkees then looked at each other. "Well, now what?" Davy asked his friends. "Do you know if that coin will buy us anything, Davy?" Mike asked. Davy looked at the coin in his hand. "It's a farthing." Davy replied, "Perhaps this will buy us something at the local pub." "At least we can get out of the cold for awhile." Peter said. So the guys walked to the nearest pub. The farthing only got them a glass of Ginger Ale and a piece of bread, but it was better than nothing. "Maybe we should go back to our apartment." Micky suggested, as he ate his small share of the bread. "Yeah, at least we still have that." Mike said. Just then, none other than Scrooge came into the pub. The Monkees quickly hid their faces so he wouldn't see them. Scrooge wasn't looking at anyone though; he marched over to the bar and ordered a small Shepard's Pie to go. When it was finally ready, Scrooge paid the man, complained about how expensive the food was, then marched out the door. "Let's follow him." Davy said, "Maybe we'll get a chance to see the ghosts of Christmas past, present and future!" "Do you really want to meet ghosts, Davy?" Micky asked. "Well...if we follow the story, maybe we'll be able to get back to our own time." Davy replied with a shrug. Deciding it was better than nothing, the Monkees got up and followed Scrooge back to his home. To Be Continued... Lisa, formerly Larrysgirl The Glick Chick's Monkees' Lair!
mickys411	A Christmas Carol	#9	[-]
Posts: 199 (12/14/08 12:41 AM) Reply Quote More My Recent Posts	Great going Lisa The Monkees carefully watched to see what direction Scrooge's buggy was heading, and carfully followed it. As the guys walked through the town, it was not only getting darker, but it was cold and snow began to fall. Even though there was some street candles burning, the Monkees still had a hard time walking the streets with the falling snow. The guys were about ready to quit, turn around and head back to their apartment, when they saw the buggy come to a stop in front of a rather large house. "Is this Scrooge's house?" Peter whispered. "I think so," Mike answered. "So what do we do now?" asked Davy. "We'll hind in those bushes by the side of house and check out to see when the ghosts will appear," said Micky. And sure enough, once Scrooge got out his buggy, he headed inside the house and the guys then scrambled in the nearby snow covered bushes. What will happen now? Mickys411 (Laura)
dydrmblvr		#10	[-]
Posts: 3420 (12/14/08 3:05 AM) Raspy McSqueaks MandrakeMallard soul peeps Reply Quote More My Recent Posts	I'm really enjoying this.........I'm picturing Mr. Babbitt as Mr. Scrooge! Wonderful story Lisa & Laura!!! Happy Holidays!!!
1bigbeatlesfan		#11	[-]
Posts: 319 (12/16/08 3:18 AM) Fanfic,She Wrote night owl Reply Quote More My Recent Posts	I'm thinking of something...I hope to post it tomorow! Lisa, formerly Larrysgirl The Glick Chick's Monkees' Lair!
1bigbeatlesfan		#12	[-]
Posts: 320 (12/17/08 3:11 AM) Fanfic,She Wrote night owl Reply Quote More My Recent Posts	Okay, here's something... "I hope something happens soon." Micky said, shivering. "This wasn't such a good idea." Peter said. "Wait, what's that?" Mike asked, pointing up to Scrooge's bedroom window. The Monkees looked up to see a weird light coming from his bedroom. "That might be the ghost of Marley." Davy said. "He visited Scrooge first." Just then, a ghost in the shape of a man flew out of the window. The ghost was wearing chains around himself. He flew around, looked down at the Monkees, then disappeared. "That was Marley." Micky stated. "Do you think Scrooge is okay?" Peter asked, "Maybe we should go ask him." The Monkees looked at each other, wondering if they should see Scrooge or wait to see what happened next. To Be Continued... Lisa, formerly Larrysgirl The Glick Chick's Monkees' Lair!
mickys411	A Christmas Carol	#13	[-]
Posts: 200 (12/17/08 11:20 PM) Reply Quote More My Recent Posts	Great going Lisa The Monkees decided to seee what happened to Scrooge, so they carefully peaked into the window. In the house, they saw Scrooge pacing the floor back and forth in his bathrobe, pjs, and slippers. "Could that really had be Marley?" he asked himself. He then shook his head and countinue to speak, Can't be he's been dead for 7 years. The spritis of Christmas, I have to do what they say, heavy chains. I'm going to bed and just sleep through it all, in cluding Christmas." Scrooge then jumped into his bed, blew the candle on his nightside out and went to bed. What will happen next? Mickys411 (Laura)
ElmerWitherspoon		#14	[-]
Posts: 768 (12/19/08 12:37 AM) Man Alive Reply Quote More My Recent Posts	A third-person account of "A Christmas Carol" has never been attempted, to my recollection. Very innovative storytelling! -Tom
1bigbeatlesfan		#15	[-]
Posts: 322 (12/20/08 1:22 AM) Fanfic,She Wrote night owl Reply Quote More My Recent Posts	Okay... "Scrooge seems alright." Mike said, "He's in bed." "We should go to bed too." Peter replied, "I'm cold." "Yeah, I don't think anything more will happen tonight." Davy added. "You three are forgetting about the other three ghosts." Micky told his friends. "The ghost of Christmas Past is due to show up soon." Just then, the clock in the village square rang one and there was a light shining in Scrooge's bedroom. The Monkees looking inside again to see Scrooge talking to a figure dressed in white and holding a lantern. The figure led Scrooge over to the bedroom window, and the Monkees ducked down so that they couldn't be seen. An instant later, Scrooge and the figure flew out of the window! "There they go!" Mike exclaimed. The Monkees began to rise off the ground as well. "Here we go too! AHHH!!!" Micky screamed along with the others. The Monkees found themselves following Scrooge and the Ghost of Christmas Past as they went on their journey for Scrooge's redemption. "At least we're not cold anymore." Peter said. To Be Continued... Lisa, formerly Larrysgirl The Glick Chick's Monkees' Lair!
mickys411	A Christmas Carol	#16	[-]
Posts: 201 (12/21/08 11:38 PM) Reply Quote More My Recent Posts	Great job Lisa Here's what I got... Warning, you may need some tissues The Ghost of Christmas past lead Scrooge and the Monkees to a place that looked very familar to Scrooge. "I know I've seen this place before," said Scrooge looking over at the stone building. Then it came to him. "This is Father Patrick's home for Children, the place my Father send me to after my Mother passed on," said Scrooge. Scrooge and the ghost went through the wall, and so did the Monkees. Once they were inside, Scrooge looked around and said, This is my room, every nook and cranny of it." The guys took around the room themselves, it contained about 8 beds and a trunk and the end of each bed. "You know, this is exactly how my Grandfather described his old boarding school," said Davy. Peter looked over at Scrooge and the ghost, then asked,"Do you think Scrooge can see us?" "I don't think so," said Mike. "Let's hope so," said Micky. At the same time, the Monkees, Scrooge and the sprit noticed a young boy about 8 years old, seated at one of the beds A suitcase was by his feet and he was wiping tears from his face. "I wonder who that is," said Peter. "If I can remember it's young Scrooge," said Mike. "I believe it is," said Davy. "Shh! they might hear us," Micky whispered. Only Scrooge and the ghost walked closer to the boy. "That's me," said Scrooge, looking over at the child. "Where are all the other children?" asked the sprit. "They all went home for Christmas. But my Father was so crule then, I was never allow to come home for the Holidays." "Noone such be alone at Christmas Ebenezer," said a female voice. Young Scrooge turned his head, as the present day Scrooge, the ghost and the Monkees. "Fran!" young Scrooge cried out. He raced to the door and hugged a young girl who looked about 15 years old. "Fran, my wonderful Sister, said Scrooge, She took care of me after Mother passed away, and before Father send me here. "Fran, what are you doing here?" asked young Scrooge. "Oh Ebenezer, Father is much kinder now and he said last night, Dear Fran, go get Ebenezer and bring hime hom for Christmas." "Really Fran?" "Yes Ebenezer, and best of all, after you finish your term here, Father is planning on putting you in a school by us." "So we can be together Fran?" "Yes, Ebenezer." Present day Scrooge, the ghost and the Monkees saw young Scrooge and Fran left on a hosre draw sled. "She was a good sister indeed," said the sprit. "Yes, said Scrooge, She took care of Father and me, till she got married and then..." Scrooge can feel his eyes fill up with tears. "She had my nephew Fred, but she got sick after she had him and never got better." More to come Mickys411 (Laura)
NoraLou		#17	[-]
Posts: 11200 (12/21/08 11:48 PM) Rev. Nora Paperback writer Amazing Grace New Admin Reply Quote More My Recent Posts	sniff
ElmerWitherspoon		#18	[-]
Posts: 776 (12/22/08 11:52 PM) Man Alive Reply Quote More My Recent Posts	Lisa and Laura's story points out something about "A Christmas Carol" that I hadn't realized before. As I understand the original story, Scrooge's father sent him away because Scrooge's mother died while giving birth to him - thus Scrooge's father blamed Ebenezer for the mother's death. Then, when Scrooge's sister died after giving birth to nephew Fred, Scrooge shunned Fred for the same reason that Scrooge's father shunned him. Call it a twist of fate or history repeating or good storytelling by Dickens, but whatever it is went unnoticed by me until reading Lisa and Laura's version. Ya learn sumthin' new every day! -Tom
1bigbeatlesfan		#19	[-]
Posts: 323 (12/23/08 2:53 AM) Fanfic,She Wrote night owl Reply Quote More My Recent Posts	Thank you Tom! And so... Suddenly, the scene changed and the Monkees and Scrooge found themselves in an office. Working at the desks were a young Scrooge and Marley. An older man walked over to them. "That's Fezziwig!" Scrooge exclaimed to the spirit. Fezziwig told the two young men to pack up for the day and get ready for the Christmas party. Scrooge and Marley quickly did so, and soon the place was alive with people and food. Young Scrooge had a grand old time, and the Monkees happily watched the celebration as well. The Monkees as well as the older Scrooge watched as his younger self talked to a young lady. Scrooge's eyes welled up with tears once again. "Oh Belle, she was a beautiful lady." He whispered. "What happened, why didn't you marry her?" The spirit asked. Scrooge didn't answer and the scene changed once again to Scrooge's house, where Belle and young Scrooge were having an argument. "Why won't you marry me?" Scrooge demanded of Belle, making Peter jump. "Because you love money more than me." Belle said, crying. She took off her engagement ring and placed it on the table. "Go then!" Scrooge shouted, "You obviously have no idea what's its like to live in this world!" "No Belle!" Old Scrooge shouted, but Belle of course couldn't hear him and she ran out the door crying. Old Scrooge and the Monkees were crying too at the sad scene. Scrooge told the spirit to take him back home and suddenly, Scrooge and the Monkees found themselves back in Scrooge's bedroom. The Monkees hid in Scrooge's cupboard while waiting for the next spirit to arrive. The clock struck two and Micky peeked through a crack in the wardrobe. "What do you see, Micky?" Mike asked. "Oh my my..." Was all Micky replied. To Be Continued... Lisa, formerly Larrysgirl The Glick Chick's Monkees' Lair!
ElmerWitherspoon		#20	[-]
Posts: 777 (12/23/08 4:56 PM) Man Alive Reply Quote More My Recent Posts	"Oh my my..." Was all Micky replied. Great line Lisa! -Tom